maghrib mein ho gareeb, to mashriq mein kya ameer thay
gintee tumhe na wahaan aati thi, na yahaan aati hai
par sukoon ab na raha, raatein khojati hai
neend tumhe na wahaan aati thi, na yahaan aati hai
karti hai baatein tumhari, diloon ko sab ke tang
sharam tumhe na wahaan aati thi, na yahaan aati hai
thodh ke apna ghuroor, karlo khuda ko yaad kabhi
par duaaein tumhe na wahaan aati thi, na yahaan aati hai
Thanks to mystic for contributing the second sher. Although I did modify it a little. I may not have completed the rest of it if you hadn’t asked. so thanks! =)
Hmmm… I want to actually go into an explanation of this. At the same time I don’t. I want folk to read and interpret as they may.
So I’ll say just one thing, yes it’s harsh. It was written as a reminder for us all, so we realize certain things that we should do, and certain things that we should avoid.
yes, it’s a little harsh, a bit of a punch to the gut, as if it hits too close to home, which it sort of does for me. but that’s a good thing. because i always need reminders.
thank you for starting (and continuing) this, and to mystic as well for contributing to what’s become a collaborative effort.
yes, it’s a little harsh, a bit of a punch to the gut, as if it hits too close to home, which it sort of does for me. but that’s a good thing. because i always need reminders.
thank you for starting (and continuing) this, and to mystic as well for contributing to what’s become a collaborative effort.
Very good ! keep it up.
Thats the uniqueness of your writing – ‘few words’ but touching to heart.
mystic and yasmine… thank /you/ folk!